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Huayuting Posted 10 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
About my writting english..
hello everyone ! my writting short english story.
please fix grammar and fluency.
Do you believe in destiny ?
The story begins about the FULL OF LOVE .In 2014, I have seen a drama on TV . I first see this drama and I very excited. Because leading role was very handsome and pretty ,I started to find about leading role information.The boy name is Mike and the girl name is Aom. We referred to as Aomike by fans.We love them in real life,no in drama story. Because there is a touching story with each other. The fight couple story really touches me. So I believe in destiny. In the summer of 2014, Mike has big problem occurred after his press conference of his declaration. A month later, they tell their entire story in an interview. He put all the pressure on his mantel.Nobody knew at all.
He said I've been taught that the truth is never die. we might be criticized today, but the truth is always the truth. The fame or money.It's true that we might need them for our everyday lives, but it's not that important to be successful. It's not about money if I'm going to live my life unhappily I rather choose not to have those things and have a happy life. She said his press conference of his declaration after I called him and asked how it was going. Then he just said one word sorry. She has seen a friend facing tough situation like this was kind of a shock to me. When she eventually knew it was true .She said my father always teach me “no matter what happens try to think it's good”and later look at what actually happens and positively find good things in there. When I got to know his attitudes and aspects what'd happened.
I know a lot of people misunderstand and blame him, but in fact he has a good heart more than anyone could know.I felt that I knew what'd happened really was, he explained all of his true feelings to me.I was very proud of him that he got this kind of perspective. Now time has passed 2year. The most difficult thing is the each other's companionship.Working together care for each other a friend like this is hard to find.
They are very good and close friends.I want to say why this story toched me.Every person in your life is a reason,all the missing and regret just to meet the person in the end.When you have suffered the injury of youth and tasted the bitterness of life.This time to meet people, it is really possible to be a lifetime.The person who appears when you are the most helpless is the angel who sent to love you.When you experience will make you grow,everything comes to you at the right moment.
We believe that you’re the destiny for each other. I hope this story can occur in my body too.Because I believe destiny and every person in my life is a reason. I think disappointing someone causes a lot more severe pain than heartbroken or any other things.I have learned the truth is never die because you will find the person who really loves you by your side.
please fix grammar and fluency.
Do you believe in destiny ?
The story begins about the FULL OF LOVE .In 2014, I have seen a drama on TV . I first see this drama and I very excited. Because leading role was very handsome and pretty ,I started to find about leading role information.The boy name is Mike and the girl name is Aom. We referred to as Aomike by fans.We love them in real life,no in drama story. Because there is a touching story with each other. The fight couple story really touches me. So I believe in destiny. In the summer of 2014, Mike has big problem occurred after his press conference of his declaration. A month later, they tell their entire story in an interview. He put all the pressure on his mantel.Nobody knew at all.
He said I've been taught that the truth is never die. we might be criticized today, but the truth is always the truth. The fame or money.It's true that we might need them for our everyday lives, but it's not that important to be successful. It's not about money if I'm going to live my life unhappily I rather choose not to have those things and have a happy life. She said his press conference of his declaration after I called him and asked how it was going. Then he just said one word sorry. She has seen a friend facing tough situation like this was kind of a shock to me. When she eventually knew it was true .She said my father always teach me “no matter what happens try to think it's good”and later look at what actually happens and positively find good things in there. When I got to know his attitudes and aspects what'd happened.
I know a lot of people misunderstand and blame him, but in fact he has a good heart more than anyone could know.I felt that I knew what'd happened really was, he explained all of his true feelings to me.I was very proud of him that he got this kind of perspective. Now time has passed 2year. The most difficult thing is the each other's companionship.Working together care for each other a friend like this is hard to find.
They are very good and close friends.I want to say why this story toched me.Every person in your life is a reason,all the missing and regret just to meet the person in the end.When you have suffered the injury of youth and tasted the bitterness of life.This time to meet people, it is really possible to be a lifetime.The person who appears when you are the most helpless is the angel who sent to love you.When you experience will make you grow,everything comes to you at the right moment.
We believe that you’re the destiny for each other. I hope this story can occur in my body too.Because I believe destiny and every person in my life is a reason. I think disappointing someone causes a lot more severe pain than heartbroken or any other things.I have learned the truth is never die because you will find the person who really loves you by your side.
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Dear Huanyuting, I am pleased to see you writing about a drama that you have really liked, and I was able to follow your story. As you are aware, however, your story contains many grammatical errors. You can readily correct many of these errors on your own.
- Dear Huanyuting, I am pleased to see you writing about a drama that you have really liked, and I was able to follow your story.
- As you are aware, however, your story contains many grammatical errors.
- You can readily correct many of these errors on your own.
- Here are some tips on how you can do this.
- 1.
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Dear Huanyuting,
I am pleased to see you writing about a drama that you have really liked, and I was able to follow your story. As you are aware, however, your story contains many grammatical errors. You can readily correct many of these errors on your own. Here are some tips on how you can do this.
1. Make sure that each sentence and clause contains a verb. This is very important in
I am pleased to see you writing about a drama that you have really liked, and I was able to follow your story. As you are aware, however, your story contains many grammatical errors. You can readily correct many of these errors on your own. Here are some tips on how you can do this.
1. Make sure that each sentence and clause contains a verb. This is very important in
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