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Vincent Teo Posted 17 years ago
Grammar
About a trip
Can I write like this way:
(a) Last Sunday, it was a fine and sunny day. Melissa and her family went to Genting Highland. They drove to the hill and parked the car at the car-park.
(b) After that, her father bought some tickets. Then, her father took them to ride the cable car. There were many people riding in the cable cars.
(c) On the cable car, Melissa was excited. She looked out from / looked out of the cable car's window. She was very thrilled because she saw the beautiful view. They were enjoyable during the trip.
(a) Last Sunday, it was a fine and sunny day. Melissa and her family went to Genting Highland. They drove to the hill and parked the car at the car-park.
(b) After that, her father bought some tickets. Then, her father took them to ride the cable car. There were many people riding in the cable cars.
(c) On the cable car, Melissa was excited. She looked out from / looked out of the cable car's window. She was very thrilled because she saw the beautiful view. They were enjoyable during the trip.
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Hi Vincent, Please have a look again at your sentences to see if you can find and eliminate any repetition. Often, a pronoun can be used instead. Best wishes, Clive
- Hi Vincent, Please have a look again at your sentences to see if you can find and eliminate any repetition.
- Often, a pronoun can be used instead.
- Best wishes, Clive
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Hi Vincent,
Please have a look again at your sentences to see if you can find and eliminate any repetition. Often, a pronoun can be used instead.
Best wishes, Clive
Please have a look again at your sentences to see if you can find and eliminate any repetition. Often, a pronoun can be used instead.
Best wishes, Clive
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(a) Last Sunday, it was a fine, sunny day. Melissa and her family went to Genting Highland. They drove to the hill and parked the car in the carpark.
(b) After that, her father bought some tickets for the cable car and took them to ride it. There were many people riding on the cable cars.
(c) On the cable car, Melissa was excited. She looked ou
(b) After that, her father bought some tickets for the cable car and took them to ride it. There were many people riding on the cable cars.
(c) On the cable car, Melissa was excited. She looked ou
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