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Hello,Could you please correct my mistakes here?Ten years ago we bought a new flat. Shortly after some strange things began to happen.Every morning and every evening(is the second every necessary?) we would hear  a strange  sound from our wardrobe at a definite time: 7:30. It was like a tapping on the door. I would be awakened by someone running upstairs almost  every morning. It was like a child's footsteps,(about 1-2 years old) of a child who had just began to walk. As we found out later the family living above had no children  of this age. A neighbor ('of ours'- is it necessary to use?) told us later that many years ago a woman dropped her grandchild from the second's floor balcony. And we decided that perhaps  it  was that child's soul.A lot of different things began to disappear at our home. One of them was a small carpet, peeler, and a baby's dummy. We even asked a priest to sanctify our flat but it didn't help.After the dummy disappered we didn't hear the baby's footsteps.Things are still disappearing and that strange  sounds can still be heard.Is it also possible to say : Both the disapperance of things and strange sounds/noises are still present at our home?

Englishmaven · Accepted Answer

I'm going to number the sentences and comment on them for you. This is pretty well written, so good job!

Ten years ago we bought a new flat. 1. Shortly after some strange things began to happen.
2. Every morning and every evening(is the second every necessary?) we would hear a strange sound from our wardrobe at a definite time: 7:30. 3. It was like a tapping on the door. 4. I would be awakened by someone running upstairs almost every morning. 5. It was like a child's footsteps,(about 1-2 years old) of a child who had just began to walk.

6. As we found out later the family living above had no children of this age. 7. A neighbor ('of ours'- is it necessary to use?) told us later that many years ago a woman dropped her grandchild from the second's floor balcony. 8. And we decided that perhaps it was that child's soul.
A lot of different things began to disappear at our home. 9. One of them was a small carpet, peeler, and a baby's dummy. 10. We even asked a priest to sanctify our flat but it didn't help.
11. After the dummy disappered we didn't hear the baby's footsteps.
12. Things are still disappearing and that strange sounds can still be heard.

1. Comma after "after"
2. Put the actual time after the introductory phrase. You could repeat "every;" it isn't a very important point (repeating it). Every morning and evening at exactly 7:30, we would hear a strange sound from our wardrobe.
3.Oops. No comment here

4. Delete "every morning."
5. It sounded like the footsteps of a child, 1 or 2 years old, who had just begun to walk.
6. Delete "as."
7. "Of ours" is optional. Say, "the second floor balcony."
8. Use a better word than "decided." Maybe "figured" or "guessed" or something else would do. Use a thesauraus if you like. Delete "and" at the beginning of the sentence. You could use a better conjunction if you like. For the sentence about things disappearing, you could start it with an adverb like "after a while."
9. You say "one of them," but you name 3.
10. Say "bless," rather than "sanctify." Put a comma before "but."
11. Comma before "and" and use "those" instead of "that" because "sounds" is plural.

Is it also possible to say : Both the disapperance of things and strange sounds/noises are still present at our home?

It sounds like the strange sounds are disappearing, so I would reword the sentence. Both the strange noises and instances of disappearing items continue in our home.

I hope this helps.

Anonymous · Answer

Thank you!

Is it better to say including a carpet, peeler and a baby's dummy?

Is it necessary to use ''a'' before dummy?

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