0
Vincent Teo Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
A snatch thief
Please help me to check it, thanks.
Last Sunday, it was a sunny day. Miss Lina wanted to go shopping alone. She was waiting paitiently at a bus stop. Suddenly, two men were riding / riding on a motorcycle snatched her handbag. // Suddenly, two men on a motorcycle snatched her handbag in no time. She was surprised and stunned at that moment.
Immediately, She fell down and screamed at the top of her voice. Luckily, a policeman passed by and saw what had happened. / A policeman saw the incident. The snatchers were scared and dropped her handbag and sped off.
The policeman walked towards Lina and helped her up. Fortunately, she had minor injury. Her leg was bleeding and scratched. / Her knee was bruises and scratched. The policeman sent her to the clinic nearby. She thanked the policeman for his kindness.
Last Sunday, it was a sunny day. Miss Lina wanted to go shopping alone. She was waiting paitiently at a bus stop. Suddenly, two men were riding / riding on a motorcycle snatched her handbag. // Suddenly, two men on a motorcycle snatched her handbag in no time. She was surprised and stunned at that moment.
Immediately, She fell down and screamed at the top of her voice. Luckily, a policeman passed by and saw what had happened. / A policeman saw the incident. The snatchers were scared and dropped her handbag and sped off.
The policeman walked towards Lina and helped her up. Fortunately, she had minor injury. Her leg was bleeding and scratched. / Her knee was bruises and scratched. The policeman sent her to the clinic nearby. She thanked the policeman for his kindness.
Top answer
You need to be careful with the word ****** because it has prurient connotations. The title should definitely not be A ****** Thief and the thieves should not be called snatchers. The only time you might use the word is in "snatched her handbag," and even that is a bit questionable, given the context of the story.
- You need to be careful with the word ****** because it has prurient connotations.
- The title should definitely not be A ****** Thief and the thieves should not be called snatchers.
- The only time you might use the word is in "snatched her handbag," and even that is a bit questionable, given the context of the story.
- I would not use the word at all in this.
- The text is pretty much okay otherwise.
Get the Weekly English Kit 📬
New words, one handy idiom, and a 2-minute quiz — delivered to your inbox to keep your streak alive.
2 Answers
0
You need to be careful with the word ****** because it has prurient connotations. The title should definitely not be A ****** Thief and the thieves should not be called snatchers. The only time you might use the word is in "snatched her handbag," and even that is a bit questionable, given the context of the story. I would not use the word at all in this. The text is pretty much okay otherwise
00
Last Sunday --, it-- was a sunny day. Miss Lina wanted to go shopping alone. She was waiting paitiently at a bus stop. Suddenly, two men ( who were) riding on a motorcycle snatched her handbag. Suddenly, two men on a motorcycle quickly snatched her handbag-- in no time--. She was surprised and stunned at that moment.
Immediate
Immediate
0
Related Questions