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I'll certainly remember that day all my life. I've been planing for weeks a date with the sweetest girl from school and that day was the moment of succes, he accepted my invitation to the a famous and romantic restaurant. Last night before the date, I didn't close my eyes, I just thought about what's going to happen. After a waking night I was very excited and happy that finally the long awaited moment had come. I went to the restaurant to wait her and when she arrived we sat at the table and ordered the house specialty. There were some really great moments until the waiter came with the bill. I was shocked when I saw that I had forgotten my wallet at home.The girl had to pay and she got mad at me.I have never been so embarrassed in my life.
Please, correct it and give me some suggestions to replace some words like great moments ; very excited and happy ; the moment of succes , thanks !!!
Thank you.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

Hello, Alex - and welcome to English Forums. Nice story. I have underlined some problem areas. Please try to fix them and post a revised version here.

I'll certainly remember that day all my life. I've been planing for weeks a date with the sweetest girl from school and that day was the moment of succes, he accepted my invitation to the a famous and romantic restaurant. Last night before the date, I didn't close my eyes, I just thought about what's going to happen. After a waking night I was very excited and happy that finally the long awaited moment had come. I went to the restaurant to wait her and when she arrived we sat at the table and ordered the house specialty. There were some really great moments until the waiter came with the bill. I was shocked when I saw that I had forgotten my wallet at home.The girl had to pay and she got mad at me.I have never been so embarrassed in my life.

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