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Fandorin Posted 17 years ago
Grammar
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Hi friends. I've sketched some sentences and would like you to correct something stylistically and gramatically. Thanks for sparing time with me. 
I think the author should pay more attention on misprints.
As of the topic, my opinion is that the battle over rights and laws of intellectual property will go on for years and end in a win. The free access to everything. Films, books, music. The system Google proposes will give it an ability to an immense data collected, as the author cited. I see no bad in that. But there should be some contestants to retain Google from gaining such a unique position. For example, I myself can't buy a specific book because there may be none in stock avaliable in our country or the price is a rip-off.
I think the author should pay more attention on misprints.
As of the topic, my opinion is that the battle over rights and laws of intellectual property will go on for years and end in a win. The free access to everything. Films, books, music. The system Google proposes will give it an ability to an immense data collected, as the author cited. I see no bad in that. But there should be some contestants to retain Google from gaining such a unique position. For example, I myself can't buy a specific book because there may be none in stock avaliable in our country or the price is a rip-off.
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I think the author should pay more attention to misprints. My opinion is that the battle over intellectual property rights and legislation will go on for years and end in free access to everything– films, books, music, etc . The system Google proposes will give it the ability to collect an immense amount of data, as the author states .
- I think the author should pay more attention to misprints.
- My opinion is that the battle over intellectual property rights and legislation will go on for years and end in free access to everything– films, books, music, etc .
- The system Google proposes will give it the ability to collect an immense amount of data, as the author states .
- I see no ill in tha t, but there should be some competition in order to prevent Google from gaining a unique position.
- It is not clear how the following sentence relates to the rest of the paragraph: For example, I myself can't buy a specific book because there may be none in stock avaliable in our country or the price is a rip-off.
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I think the author should pay more attention to misprints.
My opinion is that the battle over intellectual property rights and legislation will go on for years and end in free access to everything– films, books, music, etc. The system Google proposes will give it the ability to collect an immense amount of data, as the author states
My opinion is that the battle over intellectual property rights and legislation will go on for years and end in free access to everything– films, books, music, etc. The system Google proposes will give it the ability to collect an immense amount of data, as the author states
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Thanks Mr.M. I guess there are so much corrections due to inappropriate style and sort of informal style, are there not?
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It implies that if there is a book I can't get, what am I supposed to do? -- I understand that, but it is still too big a mental leap from the previous text. See my comment below.
Does "such a unique position" not fit the context or it is grammatically wrong?-- It does not fit, since the uniqueness of the position was not previously evident; in fact, what precisely the paragra
Does "such a unique position" not fit the context or it is grammatically wrong?-- It does not fit, since the uniqueness of the position was not previously evident; in fact, what precisely the paragra
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It hasn't been finished, actually. After that inexplicable sentence I could have written:
"Google can give an access to it with small fee or free of charge at all. It's not all about my country but about less developed ones which can't afford vast diversity of libraries. It's about books which are rarely found and are of great value to us. That's why restricting access to the trove doesn't
"Google can give an access to it with small fee or free of charge at all. It's not all about my country but about less developed ones which can't afford vast diversity of libraries. It's about books which are rarely found and are of great value to us. That's why restricting access to the trove doesn't
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I don't judge too seriously, but if you expect accurate help, you need to be sure your submissions are as complete and clear as you can make them.
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Yes, I understand that. I haven't written it properly and I have posted it ill-considered. Thanks for great help and patience Mr. M.
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