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Newguest Posted 18 years ago
Legal Studies
a sentence
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How does this sentence sound to you? Would you change it somehow?
The offers, however, are made available from the moment they are open, exclusive of the secret information of the company in view of the counteracting unfair competition regulations, if the Contractor stipulated, not later than the offer submission deadline, that they must not be made available.
thanks
How does this sentence sound to you? Would you change it somehow?
The offers, however, are made available from the moment they are open, exclusive of the secret information of the company in view of the counteracting unfair competition regulations, if the Contractor stipulated, not later than the offer submission deadline, that they must not be made available.
thanks
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I really cannot make enough sense of it as it stands to offer a decent edit. I suggest that you break it up into two or three sentences, at least.
- I really cannot make enough sense of it as it stands to offer a decent edit.
- I suggest that you break it up into two or three sentences, at least.
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I really cannot make enough sense of it as it stands to offer a decent edit. I suggest that you break it up into two or three sentences, at least.
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Ok. How about this one?
Only the information, if this has been stipulated by the Contractor not later than the offer submission deadline, which are confidential to the company, bearing in mind counteracting unfair competition regulations, must not be made available.
I didn't know how to break it up into two sentences.
Actually, I've broken it up, because I wrote THE OFFE
Only the information, if this has been stipulated by the Contractor not later than the offer submission deadline, which are confidential to the company, bearing in mind counteracting unfair competition regulations, must not be made available.
I didn't know how to break it up into two sentences.
Actually, I've broken it up, because I wrote THE OFFE
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My try:
Information that has been submitted by the Contractor not later than the offer submission deadline and which is confidential to the company, and which is not against unfair competition regulations, must not be made available.
Information that has been submitted by the Contractor not later than the offer submission deadline and which is confidential to the company, and which is not against unfair competition regulations, must not be made available.
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Your sentence is pretty good, but the Contractor stipulated (if this is the right word) that this information cannot/musn't be made available to the public. You used the word "submitted by the Contractor."
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NewguestOk. How about this one?
Only the information, if this has been stipulated by the Contractor not later than the offer submission deadline, which are confidential to the company, bearing in mind counteracting unfair competition regulations, must not be made available.
I didn't know how to break it up into two sentences.
Actually, I've brok
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How about this:
The offers, however, are made available from the moment they are open. Information that has been stipulated by the Contractor not later than the offer submission deadline and which is confidential to the company, and which is not against unfair competition regulations, must not be made available.
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