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Cboutin3 Posted 13 years ago
Grammar
A question about the structure of this sentence?
Is the statement in quotes the way it is correct or should I phrase the sentence in another way? Also, should I include the second "that"? After assisting in the creation of the dragonlances, Gilthanas and Silvara, "with some guidance from Fizban," undertook a mission to try to recover the metallic dragon eggs, since this would prove to the metallic dragons that their Oath of Neutrality had been broken by Takhisis and "that" they should enter the war.
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Yes and yes. I think the paragraph is good as it stands. My only concern is the since this would prove ...
- Yes and yes.
- I think the paragraph is good as it stands.
- My only concern is the since this would prove ...
- section.
- It's definitely not wrong, but it sounds a bit clumsy to me, and makes the sentence seem to run on a bit.
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Yes and yes.
I think the paragraph is good as it stands. My only concern is the since this would prove ... section. It's definitely not wrong, but it sounds a bit clumsy to me, and makes the sentence seem to run on a bit. I might use a word or phrase that draws more attention to itself as a separator between those two parts of the sentence - for example, replace since this would
I think the paragraph is good as it stands. My only concern is the since this would prove ... section. It's definitely not wrong, but it sounds a bit clumsy to me, and makes the sentence seem to run on a bit. I might use a word or phrase that draws more attention to itself as a separator between those two parts of the sentence - for example, replace since this would
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Thanks for your help. I agree that "in order to" is a better choice, but just one quick question about it. Should I keep the comma before "in order to" or delete it?
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1. "... undertook a mission to try to recover the metallic dragon eggs in order to prove to the metallic dragons that their Oath ..."
2. "... undertook a mission to try to recover the metallic dragon eggs, in order to prove to the metallic dragons that their Oath ..."
I'm not really sure which to recommend. Either one seems OK to me. If I speak it out loud, I put a short pause in ther
2. "... undertook a mission to try to recover the metallic dragon eggs, in order to prove to the metallic dragons that their Oath ..."
I'm not really sure which to recommend. Either one seems OK to me. If I speak it out loud, I put a short pause in ther
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