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Anonymous Posted 21 years ago

A Poem I wrote I'll Post More

I hate it...

I hate it when he makes me cry at night.

I hate it when we start to fight.

I hate it when I'm day and he's night.

I hate it when the stars don't shine bright.

I hate it when he makes me fall apart.

I hated it when he broke my heart.

I hate it when he makes fun of me.

Maybe I hate him because he never said he loved me.

-Lauren Sparkes
  

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, when there's no exchange of love. I like it and please post your other poems, if you may of course.

— The Sweet Desert

  • , when there's no exchange of love.
  • I like it and please post your other poems, if you may of course.
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Lauren, I guess your poem is about that sort of love which is only from one of the couple, i.e., when there's no exchange of love. I like it and please post your other poems, if you may of course.
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Awww, a very sad poem. It tugs a the heartstring...Emotion: sad
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Hello Lauren, This is a good start.Would be good if you can elaborate the poem by bringing out more of the realtionship into it. I liked the line 'I hate it when I'm day and he's night'. This is a good line to show how different you both are.
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g'day lauren

an excellent piece with the magical twist in the tail to reverse perception and engage the reader

the broken rhythm of hated is perfect

this is poetry and your are a poet

robert
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This is someone else..........i just wanted to put a poem i wrote once....about Basketball and about myself


The Court, where i meet it
game time, when i see it
its bouncy, full of air
its rubber, is soft
its shape, circular
the sound, unbelivable
it has, no eyes
but it knows, where its going
its mission
thro
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I enjoyed the latter a bit more than the previous one... Emotion: big smile
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