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Peaceblinkfriend Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
A piece of creative writing - Any suggestions would be appreciated.
Hi all,
This is a piece of creative writing that I wrote. I would really appreciate if you could give me any suggestions or comments. I believe there could be much more to change in order to make it better besides the ones that I indicated. I wonder if you could rephrase it - at your convenince, of course. Thank you.
The light steamed through the window and lit up the attic1. Jean stood in the attic. It was years since she had climbed the stairs to the attic. Everything was covered with dust. There were cobwebs everywhere.
Jean2 went to the corner of the attic and unearthed a small wooden box. The box was engraved with a picture of a dove. With the contours in gold3. She carefully opened the box. A silver key was laying in the middle of the box. It was attached with a small piece of string. She smiled with joy and hope.
1. How would you describe this scene?
2. Should I use the pronoun 'she' here?
3. How would you say it?
Thank you again.
Best wishes,
PBF
This is a piece of creative writing that I wrote. I would really appreciate if you could give me any suggestions or comments. I believe there could be much more to change in order to make it better besides the ones that I indicated. I wonder if you could rephrase it - at your convenince, of course. Thank you.
The light steamed through the window and lit up the attic1. Jean stood in the attic. It was years since she had climbed the stairs to the attic. Everything was covered with dust. There were cobwebs everywhere.
Jean2 went to the corner of the attic and unearthed a small wooden box. The box was engraved with a picture of a dove. With the contours in gold3. She carefully opened the box. A silver key was laying in the middle of the box. It was attached with a small piece of string. She smiled with joy and hope.
1. How would you describe this scene?
2. Should I use the pronoun 'she' here?
3. How would you say it?
Thank you again.
Best wishes,
PBF
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Peaceblinkfriend Hi all, This is a piece of creative writing that I wrote. I would really appreciate if you could give me any suggestions or comments. I believe there could be much more to change in order to make it better besides the ones that I indicated.
- Peaceblinkfriend Hi all, This is a piece of creative writing that I wrote.
- I would really appreciate if you could give me any suggestions or comments.
- I believe there could be much more to change in order to make it better besides the ones that I indicated.
- I wonder if you could rephrase it - at your convenince, of course.
- Thank you.
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PeaceblinkfriendHi all,
This is a piece of creative writing that I wrote. I would really appreciate if you could give me any suggestions or comments. I believe there could be much more to change in order to make it better besides the ones that I indicated. I wonder if you could rephrase it - at your convenince, of course. Thank you.
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