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A motivation letter for a master degree, thx for ur correction ans ideas

0 Dear Madam or Sir, 02br
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00My name is *** and I was graduated in June 2005 with a bachelor degree in International business at the *** University in Finland. I am writing to apply for the pre master’s program in International Business and Management in your University. 02br
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00My interest to international business and management studies is driven by the experiment I already have in the international field. As a Russian living in Finland I am speaking Russian and Finish as a mother tongue and my level of English is good. I always lived in a multicultural environment between Russia and Finland and I am used to face cultural differences in everyday life. I like the exchange between culture and people that international business makes possible. I am very interested and highly motivated to work and live in the future in an international environment and I have good basis for it. 02br
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00Moreover my major for my bachelor was Russian trade. I think this is an interesting added value to international business and management studies. Russia will take more and more place in international business in the future and knowing Russian business is an advantage to understand business behaviour of certain countries that have big differences with western countries. 02br
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00I also have a good level of knowledge on management. I was taught during three year about different management related topic like *** In addition to that I have some experiment in this field. I am working this summer for four month as manager of a holiday centre in Finland. This includes dealing with a staff of 25 people and a budget of *** €. 02br
00This experiment is teaching me how to manage people, how to deal with every situation and how to carry responsibilities like customer satisfaction or customer safety. It is creating extreme interest, appeal and I want to broaden my knowledge concerning similar issues. 02br
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00I got my interest in The Netherland one year ago as an exchange student. I was studying *** at *** university during six month. So I am already familiar with Dutch culture and I really appreciate it. Furthermore a good English knowledge is in my opinion of the highest importance in the current international environment and studying in a university with a high reputation like yours in The Netherlands is a great opportunity to reach it. I also chose The Netherlands because I want to do research after my master degree and as a very high educated country it offers good perspectives for it. 02br
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00Thank you very much for considering my application. I am looking forward for your positive response. 02br
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00Yours faithfully 0-
  

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0These words or phrases need correction: 02br 02br 00Madam or Sir 02br 00was graduated 02br 00bachelor 02br 00International business 02br 00the *** University 02br 00pre master’s 02br 00your University 02br 00interest to 02br 00experiment 02br 00Finland (needs a comma) 02br 00I am speaking 02br 00Finish 02br 00a mother tongue (should be plural) 02br 00I always lived (verb aspect) 02br 00used to face 02br 00culture (s/b plural) 02br 00basis (word choice-- use 'background') 02br 00bachelor 02br 00take more and more place (rephrase) 02br 00to understand (wrong form) 02br 00business behaviour (needs 'the') 02br 00have big differences with (change to 'differ greatly from') 02br 00three year 02br 00management related topic (hyphenate and pluralize) 02br 00experiment 02br 00four month 02br 00*** € (currency sign precedes amount) 02br 00experiment (you mean 'experience') 02br 00extreme interest, appeal ( 'an extreme interest and appeal,' ) 02br 00got my interest ('acquired an interest') 02br 00The Netherland 02br 00*** university during six month (capitalize, pluralize and use 'for') 02br 00month. So ('month, so') 02br 00and I really appreciate it (omit this phrase) 02br 00reach ('aquire') 02br 00master 02br 00perspectives ('prospects') 02br 0-

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  • 0These words or phrases need correction: 02br 02br 00Madam or Sir 02br 00was graduated 02br 00bachelor 02br 00International business 02br 00the *** University 02br 00pre master’s 02br 00your University 02br 00interest to 02br 00experiment 02br 00Finland (needs a comma) 02br 00I am speaking 02br 00Finish 02br 00a mother tongue (should be plural) 02br 00I always lived (verb aspect) 02br 00used to face 02br 00culture (s/b plural) 02br 00basis (word choice-- use 'background') 02br 00bachelor 02br 00take more and more place (rephrase) 02br 00to understand (wrong form) 02br 00business behaviour (needs 'the') 02br 00have big differences with (change to 'differ greatly from') 02br 00three year 02br 00management related topic (hyphenate and pluralize) 02br 00experiment 02br 00four month 02br 00*** € (currency sign precedes amount) 02br 00experiment (you mean 'experience') 02br 00extreme interest, appeal ( 'an extreme interest and appeal,' ) 02br 00got my interest ('acquired an interest') 02br 00The Netherland 02br 00*** university during six month (capitalize, pluralize and use 'for') 02br 00month.
  • So ('month, so') 02br 00and I really appreciate it (omit this phrase) 02br 00reach ('aquire') 02br 00master 02br 00perspectives ('prospects') 02br 0-
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0These words or phrases need correction: 02br
02br
00Madam or Sir 02br
00was graduated 02br
00bachelor 02br
00International business 02br
00the *** University 02br
00pre master’s 02br
00your University 02br
00interest to 02br
00experiment 02br
00Finland (needs a comma
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