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P3t3r Posted 21 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
A little help with grammar.
0 Hi, anyone here good with English grammar and have a little time to spend. ( like 5 minutes max) I check all my grammars on my English assignments but I always get really low marks in this part. I would get perfect in knowledge and application but my grammar marks really brought me down. So I was wondering if anyone have a little time to check the grammar of this short assignment for me. I checked it myself like 3 times and corrected a couple of misplaced modifiers and awkard sentences. My grammar knowledge is very limited so... Thanks alot. 02 br
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00 Tom Clancy’s Splinter Cell by David Michaels (#355) 02 br
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00 Basic Plot: Andrei Zdrok is a Russian businessman with an illegal network of arms trading. Zdrok owns a company called “The Shop” and he makes money by selling illegal arms to his customers. Third Echelon, a top-secret branch of the NSA, caught the wind of this trade. Sam Fisher, an operative of the Third Echelon, was sent to track down Zdrok and his connections. Fisher discovered Zdrok’s biggest customer, Nasir Tarighian, after a top stealth mission to Zdrok’s headquarters in Switzerland. Nasir turned out to be a well-known Iranian terrorist who has deep hatreds for the newly liberated Iraqis. During a top-secret mission to a big business mall that belongs to Nasir, Fisher discovered the project Nasir had been working on: a giant missile silo with enough firepower to destroy the entire Iraqi capital. Fisher saved the day by having the missile sabotaged along with the terrorists. 02 br
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00 Protagonist and Characterization: The protagonist of the story is Sam Fisher, a senior agent of a top-secret government organization called Third Echelon. Mr. Fisher is characterized as an intelligent predator who strikes from total stealth and concealment. The predator is someone who delivers deadly blows to his enemies both physically and psychologically without leaving traces. Fisher’s infiltration of Zdrok’s headquarter would be a perfect example of this characterization. Fisher destroyed Zdrok’s money supply and used the documents he stolen to turn Zdrok’s ally against Zdrok. 02 br
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00 Settings: The physical setting is based on several locations around the world, mainly around Middle East. The key locations are Baku, Switzerland; Famagusta, Cyprus and Tel Aviv; Israel. The book is based on the time period immediately after the liberation of Iraq in 2003. The atmosphere created by this book is one of tension, cold-blooded violence and betrayal. 02 br
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00 Start of the assingment: 02 br
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00 Tom Clancy’s Splinter Cell by David Michaels (#355) 02 br
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00 Basic Plot: Andrei Zdrok is a Russian businessman with an illegal network of arms trading. Zdrok owns a company called “The Shop” and he makes money by selling illegal arms to his customers. Third Echelon, a top-secret branch of the NSA, caught the wind of this trade. Sam Fisher, an operative of the Third Echelon, was sent to track down Zdrok and his connections. Fisher discovered Zdrok’s biggest customer, Nasir Tarighian, after a top stealth mission to Zdrok’s headquarters in Switzerland. Nasir turned out to be a well-known Iranian terrorist who has deep hatreds for the newly liberated Iraqis. During a top-secret mission to a big business mall that belongs to Nasir, Fisher discovered the project Nasir had been working on: a giant missile silo with enough firepower to destroy the entire Iraqi capital. Fisher saved the day by having the missile sabotaged along with the terrorists. 02 br
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00 Protagonist and Characterization: The protagonist of the story is Sam Fisher, a senior agent of a top-secret government organization called Third Echelon. Mr. Fisher is characterized as an intelligent predator who strikes from total stealth and concealment. The predator is someone who delivers deadly blows to his enemies both physically and psychologically without leaving traces. Fisher’s infiltration of Zdrok’s headquarter would be a perfect example of this characterization. Fisher destroyed Zdrok’s money supply and used the documents he stolen to turn Zdrok’s ally against Zdrok. 02 br
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00 Settings: The physical setting is based on several locations around the world, mainly around Middle East. The key locations are Baku, Switzerland; Famagusta, Cyprus and Tel Aviv; Israel. The book is based on the time period immediately after the liberation of Iraq in 2003. The atmosphere created by this book is one of tension, cold-blooded violence and betrayal. 02 br
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0 Just a couple of quick changes, someone else can improve it more. It doesn't really flow easily but otherwise seems quite good to me. 02 br 02 br 00 Basic Plot: Andrei Zdrok is a Russian businessman with an illegal network of arms trading.
- 0 Just a couple of quick changes, someone else can improve it more.
- It doesn't really flow easily but otherwise seems quite good to me.
- 02 br 02 br 00 Basic Plot: Andrei Zdrok is a Russian businessman with an illegal network of arms trading.
- Zdrok owns a company called “The Shop” and he makes money by selling illegal arms to his customers.
- Third Echelon, a top-secret branch of the NSA, caught wind of this trade.
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0 Just a couple of quick changes, someone else can improve it more. It doesn't really flow easily but otherwise seems quite good to me. 02 br
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00 Basic Plot: Andrei Zdrok is a Russian businessman with an illegal network of arms trading. Zdrok owns a company called “The Shop” and he makes money by selling illegal arms to his customers. Third Echelon, a top-secret branch of th
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00 Basic Plot: Andrei Zdrok is a Russian businessman with an illegal network of arms trading. Zdrok owns a company called “The Shop” and he makes money by selling illegal arms to his customers. Third Echelon, a top-secret branch of th
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0 Thank you very much. Sorry for the late reply, been busy with school work. 0-
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