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Bbser Posted 15 years ago
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A little help needed to polish this sentence, please?
Just as its logo color – green – suggests, I view TD as a youth full of energy and having a golden future. I am willing to be part of it and make my own contributions.
I was thinking about putting this in my colver letter. Could you please do me a favor to make it sounds better? And, do you think those dashes are used properly? Thanks.
BBSER
I was thinking about putting this in my colver letter. Could you please do me a favor to make it sounds better? And, do you think those dashes are used properly? Thanks.
BBSER
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The problem with the dashes is that they make 'green' too prominent, but that is not the real point of the sentence. You also have a slight reference problem. 'Be willing to' carries a negative tone: it refers to something we will do although we don't want to.
- The problem with the dashes is that they make 'green' too prominent, but that is not the real point of the sentence.
- You also have a slight reference problem.
- 'Be willing to' carries a negative tone: it refers to something we will do although we don't want to.
- Just as the green of its logo suggests , TD is an energetic youth with a golden future.
- I would like to be part of it and make my own contributions.
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The problem with the dashes is that they make 'green' too prominent, but that is not the real point of the sentence. You also have a slight reference problem. 'Be willing to' carries a negative tone: it refers to something we will do although we don't want to.
Just as the green of its logo suggests, TD is an energetic youth with a golden future. I would like to be
Just as the green of its logo suggests, TD is an energetic youth with a golden future. I would like to be
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Thank you, Mister. You are a life saver!
Just one concern: TD means TD bank, as you might have known this, TD paints their buildings green all over, so it seems that saying "the color of its logo" is not precise. I would like to say something like a feature color. Could you make a suggestion further, please? Thanks.
Just one concern: TD means TD bank, as you might have known this, TD paints their buildings green all over, so it seems that saying "the color of its logo" is not precise. I would like to say something like a feature color. Could you make a suggestion further, please? Thanks.
Mister MicawberThe problem with the dashes is that th
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Actually, I've had an account with TD for 30 years now, but I haven't seen a building in the last 20 years. If they are really all green, then:
Just as the green of its walls suggests, TD is an energetic youth with a golden future. I would like to be part of it and make my own contributions.
But I think they'll get the point with 'logo', and that sounds better.
Just as the green of its walls suggests, TD is an energetic youth with a golden future. I would like to be part of it and make my own contributions.
But I think they'll get the point with 'logo', and that sounds better.
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Great, Mister. If you so, I go with logo. Thanks.
Speaking of their buildings or houses, you may have a look at here for their images by copy and paste this link: http://www.google.ca/images?q=
Speaking of their buildings or houses, you may have a look at here for their images by copy and paste this link: http://www.google.ca/images?q=
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