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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
Letter Writing
A letter to head of HR departament
I have to write a letter so I wonder if anyone could take alook at the present draft I have below and make some valid suggestions - style, word choice, punctuation, any other ideas.
Thank you in advande - this is really very important to me.
Dear Sir/Madam,
From the information I could find out about [company name] it appears that my skills and expertise could be of interest to your company. I believe that my proven commercial experience in financial sector of the ICT could contribute to projects you might have right now or in the near future.
At my last assignment I was executing a role of .net developer for Nexum Insurance Technologies, but my skills are not limited to programming - over the last 6 years of my career I have also held positions of software tester and an analyst - these experiences have given me a solid practical knowledge of the software development life cycle.
I have just moved from Europe to Auckland and I am now looking for a new opportunity to apply my energy, skills and knowledge. I intend to continue working as a .net developer. As a wise recruiter you will surely understand that what I may initially lack in the particular knowledge of your ongoing projects, internal code libraries and concepts, I will more than compensate with my work ethic, sincere attitude, enthusiasm and eagerness to show what I am capable of. I can reassure you that I have a very strong motivation to do well and [company name] could very well benefit from it. I would appreciate if you would give me the opportunity to prove it.
Please find my contact information in the attached CV
Sincerely,
[my name]
Thank you in advande - this is really very important to me.
Dear Sir/Madam,
From the information I could find out about [company name] it appears that my skills and expertise could be of interest to your company. I believe that my proven commercial experience in financial sector of the ICT could contribute to projects you might have right now or in the near future.
At my last assignment I was executing a role of .net developer for Nexum Insurance Technologies, but my skills are not limited to programming - over the last 6 years of my career I have also held positions of software tester and an analyst - these experiences have given me a solid practical knowledge of the software development life cycle.
I have just moved from Europe to Auckland and I am now looking for a new opportunity to apply my energy, skills and knowledge. I intend to continue working as a .net developer. As a wise recruiter you will surely understand that what I may initially lack in the particular knowledge of your ongoing projects, internal code libraries and concepts, I will more than compensate with my work ethic, sincere attitude, enthusiasm and eagerness to show what I am capable of. I can reassure you that I have a very strong motivation to do well and [company name] could very well benefit from it. I would appreciate if you would give me the opportunity to prove it.
Please find my contact information in the attached CV
Sincerely,
[my name]
Top answer
It is an excellent contact letter. You might be a bit more specific in your opening sentence. It sounds too much like a fishing expedition.
- It is an excellent contact letter.
- You might be a bit more specific in your opening sentence.
- It sounds too much like a fishing expedition.
- Give it some more punch.
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It is an excellent contact letter.
You might be a bit more specific in your opening sentence. It sounds too much like a fishing expedition. Give it some more punch.
You might be a bit more specific in your opening sentence. It sounds too much like a fishing expedition. Give it some more punch.
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