a letter to an editor once again. Anyone please check!

0First ,many thanks to people who agree to correct the essays! you are doing a great job!02br
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00I have the following task:02br
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00The following comments were made during a radio programme by young people talking about different attitudes to work. Listeners to the discussion were invited to send in their views to the programme editor. You decide to write a letter responding to the points raised and giving your own opinions. 02br
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001. I want to earn lots of money- that's all I care about.02br
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002. I want a job that leaves me with plenty of free time.02br
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003.What matters most to me is job satisfaction. i only want to do a job that i really enjoy.02br
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00write your letter in 300-350 words in an appropriate style.02br
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00So here's my attempt to handle with the task.02br
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00Dear Sir or Madam,02br
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00Being a regular listener and admirer of your radio programme, I couldn't help giving my own point of view on the subject raised in the last discussion. Naturally, all people think in a different way and what is good for me can be bad for another person. That's why i'm not going to criticise or judge them. However, I can't support the attitude that the main thing about the job is purely money. If you have a lot of money or once you earned a lot of money, you strive for having more and more.As a result you get into a vicious circle, which makes it harder and harder to get out. Moreover, too much work will bring out health problems , such as increased nervousness, splitting headaches, heart diseases, etc. You'll be on the verge of self-desruction.Will money make you happy if you have no health and no privite life?There are few people who are rolling in money while doing nothing or almost nothing. Of course, they don't suffer from the symptoms mentioned above. If you dream of becoming rich by your own strength, then be ready to feel completetly snowed under and keep top of everything regarding your job.02br
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00To my mind, job satisfaction is much more important than money.We're living on this planet only once. I think eagerness for earning money is not something worth wasting the precious minutes of our life on. There are so many nice things besides money. Unfortunately, it's hardly possible to experience them if you are obcessed with work and money and toil away from morning till night. How nice it is to see a person, who takes up their job full of enthusiasm and energy and who wakes up in the morning not with a heavy sigh "oh no, work... again" but with a happy exclamation " what a beautiful day! i'm so happy i have a job that can't spoil it!"Obviously, the salary may be pretty low, but if you earn enough to get by then it doesn't seem to be a problem. It's hard for materially-orientated people , but possible if they learn to appreciate the things that life gives you.02br
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00Another good preference that i 've heard during the programme is having the job that leaves a lot of free time. If you have such a job, then you can say without any hesitation that your life is not only working , eating and sleeping. You've got lots of time for yourself, for your menatl and physical self-improvement, for fun. But again you can't be fully content with the amount of money you earn.02br
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00As for me, it'd be ideal if I could find a job that brings me both good money and satisfaction, but it's far from reality. If I had to choose between job satisfaction and money, the latter would be the last thing I'd take into consideration.02br
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00I'm looking forward to hearing from you and from other listeners.02br
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00Yours faithfully,02br
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00Victoria Komorowskaya0-