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Nasser Hegazy Posted 14 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
A letter of motivation for joining architectural study program in university
Dear all
please find below my motivation letter for correction and improving advice, your quick responses will be highly appreciated since I've to submit it on 22 July
thanks
A letter of motivation
Dear Sir / Madam
The mother art is architecture. Without architecture of our own we have no soul of our own civilization, this quote of the great architect Frank Lloyd Wright is really describes my belief in architecture.
The history of nations is being recorded through their buildings and architecture and as an Egyptian I feel the greatness of our civilization by looking to our eternal architecture through all ages wishing to recall it and participate in building the new modern Egypt.
I like art. I have always been into it. As a daughter of an architect (my beloved father). I was raised in a home full of inspiration and creativity. I involved myself into the art work since my childhood; I have always liked drawing, creating things, making unique accessories, furniture and even clothes.
I loved lego constructing and decorating things, doing all sorts of creative activities. At the same time I have always engaged mathematics and geometry developing not only artistic skills and vivid imagination, but also the strong controlled analytical thinking and logical mind.
I have always fascinated with my father’s designs and work. Pointing to one of his buildings for my friends while passing by is my habit and a great source of pride for me. It is my dream to see my own work standing there, make my marks and leave my own fingerprints to this great world of architecture. That is why I chose architecture as my path. It will fulfill my passion and improve my creativity and logical skills.
I’m applying for Architectural Engineering study group - Winter Semester 2012 at GUC, I didn’t put much effort in searching for another university since your great reputation is ahead of all other universities in Cairo, I have many friends and relatives who are studying in GUC and all of them encouraged me to join in.
The GUC study program, excellent learning environment and its highly qualified staff will offer me all promising carrier opportunities and pushing me to make my dreams come true and become a great talented architect.
Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to your acceptance.
please find below my motivation letter for correction and improving advice, your quick responses will be highly appreciated since I've to submit it on 22 July
thanks
A letter of motivation
Dear Sir / Madam
The mother art is architecture. Without architecture of our own we have no soul of our own civilization, this quote of the great architect Frank Lloyd Wright is really describes my belief in architecture.
The history of nations is being recorded through their buildings and architecture and as an Egyptian I feel the greatness of our civilization by looking to our eternal architecture through all ages wishing to recall it and participate in building the new modern Egypt.
I like art. I have always been into it. As a daughter of an architect (my beloved father). I was raised in a home full of inspiration and creativity. I involved myself into the art work since my childhood; I have always liked drawing, creating things, making unique accessories, furniture and even clothes.
I loved lego constructing and decorating things, doing all sorts of creative activities. At the same time I have always engaged mathematics and geometry developing not only artistic skills and vivid imagination, but also the strong controlled analytical thinking and logical mind.
I have always fascinated with my father’s designs and work. Pointing to one of his buildings for my friends while passing by is my habit and a great source of pride for me. It is my dream to see my own work standing there, make my marks and leave my own fingerprints to this great world of architecture. That is why I chose architecture as my path. It will fulfill my passion and improve my creativity and logical skills.
I’m applying for Architectural Engineering study group - Winter Semester 2012 at GUC, I didn’t put much effort in searching for another university since your great reputation is ahead of all other universities in Cairo, I have many friends and relatives who are studying in GUC and all of them encouraged me to join in.
The GUC study program, excellent learning environment and its highly qualified staff will offer me all promising carrier opportunities and pushing me to make my dreams come true and become a great talented architect.
Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to your acceptance.
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Nasser Hegazy The mother art is architecture. Without architecture of our own we have no soul of our own civilization, I would add quotation marks here Nasser Hegazy Wright is really no need for is Nasser Hegazy really describes my belief in architecture. better would be: describes my beliefs in architecture perfectly.
- Nasser Hegazy The mother art is architecture.
- Without architecture of our own we have no soul of our own civilization, I would add quotation marks here Nasser Hegazy Wright is really no need for is Nasser Hegazy really describes my belief in architecture.
- better would be: describes my beliefs in architecture perfectly.
- it is implied as you state you are his daughter.
- Nasser Hegazy I involved myself into the art work since my childhood Since my childhood I've involved myself in art - or - works of art Nasser Hegazy I have always engaged mathematics doesn't really make sense, I would change it to "I have always enjoyed mathematics" if you want to keep engage as a verb then make it "I have always been engaged in mathematics" Nasser Hegazy I have always fascinated I have always been fascinated with my father's work - or - I have always fascinated my father with my work - depending on what you mean.
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Nasser HegazyThe mother art is architecture. Without architecture of our own we have no soul of our own civilization,I would add quotation marks here
Nasser HegazyWright is reallyno need for is
Nasser Hegazyreally describes my belief in architecture.better would be: describes my beliefs
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Thanks a lot and here is my second version hope to hear soon from you
Regards
Dear Sir / Madam
My name is Malak Hegazy, as an Egyptian I know that the history of nations is being recorded through their buildings and architecture; I feel the greatness of our civilization by looking at our eternal architecture through all ages wishing to recall it and participate in building th
Regards
Dear Sir / Madam
My name is Malak Hegazy, as an Egyptian I know that the history of nations is being recorded through their buildings and architecture; I feel the greatness of our civilization by looking at our eternal architecture through all ages wishing to recall it and participate in building th
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