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Angliholic Posted 16 years ago
Grammar
A Green Basil
Wearing a green blouse,
standing outside in the morning,
you look like a maid from an ancient palace
carrying a long vase on your shoulder.
Small purple bells dot your vase here and there,
and every bell gives off a faint scent.
Four buzzing bees come flying to collect your sweet pollen,
all dancing like four cheerful young girls,
gathering water from a well in an age-old town.
Either gathering water of life
or collecting nector from your sweet flowers
is all for a fountain of inspiration
that has been dried-up for ages and ages.
Hi,
I dashed off the above piece to practice my writing. Correct me if I am wrong. Thanks.
standing outside in the morning,
you look like a maid from an ancient palace
carrying a long vase on your shoulder.
Small purple bells dot your vase here and there,
and every bell gives off a faint scent.
Four buzzing bees come flying to collect your sweet pollen,
all dancing like four cheerful young girls,
gathering water from a well in an age-old town.
Either gathering water of life
or collecting nector from your sweet flowers
is all for a fountain of inspiration
that has been dried-up for ages and ages.
Hi,
I dashed off the above piece to practice my writing. Correct me if I am wrong. Thanks.
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Hi. Nectar (sp.)
I have a little problem with the last stanza.
Shouldn't it be:
Either A or B,
All is for X. ?
It feels like a sentence without a subject.
Whatever you do is all for this. (I think this is the idea.)
You have, Either A or B is all for X.
I think you mean BOTH A and B, but it seems like we must choose one or t
I have a little problem with the last stanza.
Shouldn't it be:
Either A or B,
All is for X. ?
It feels like a sentence without a subject.
Whatever you do is all for this. (I think this is the idea.)
You have, Either A or B is all for X.
I think you mean BOTH A and B, but it seems like we must choose one or t
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nectar.
Regarding the ending, I take it that water of life is nectar. Certainly gathering is collecting. So at the end you have, in effect, Either gathering nectar or gathering nectar, which is really saying the same thing twice. That part isn't clear.
I think all for a fountain of inspiration is supposed to mean that the nectar is to be used to r
Regarding the ending, I take it that water of life is nectar. Certainly gathering is collecting. So at the end you have, in effect, Either gathering nectar or gathering nectar, which is really saying the same thing twice. That part isn't clear.
I think all for a fountain of inspiration is supposed to mean that the nectar is to be used to r
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Thanks to Philip, Avangi, and Jim.
I subscribe to your interpretation and recast. The following is my rewrite of the last stanza. Correct me if there is anything that doesn't sound right. Thanks again.
The well is so deep and cool
overflowing with nectar all the year.
It's drink for Muse to replenish a fountain of inspiration
That has been dried-up for ages.
I subscribe to your interpretation and recast. The following is my rewrite of the last stanza. Correct me if there is anything that doesn't sound right. Thanks again.
The well is so deep and cool
overflowing with nectar all the year.
It's drink for Muse to replenish a fountain of inspiration
That has been dried-up for ages.
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