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Tnas Posted 14 years ago
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A city in Brazil

Hello folks,

It's my first post. I'm a newbie english student and need to help to improve my English. I have tried to write a small composition about a city in Brazil (the country where I'm from) and I'd like very much if anyone could correct it for me. The composition follow below:

Vitória is a city in Brazil with a great grow up potential. There are some reasons to believe that this city can become a better place to live. For example, its natural attractions like beaches, and mountains are sights that can help the city to develop. Indeed, several companies are installing offices in the city. Because this, much qualified manpower has been attracted to Vitória.

However, there is a necessity that must to be solved about the city: a new airport. The current Vitória’s airport doesn’t support the demand flies. Another aspect about the present airport is that there aren’t traffic of international flights in it. So, if a person need to flight abroad, for example, it’s necessary to travel to the most next city to get a international flight.

It’s clear that is urgent to build a new airport in Vitória. Nevertheless, the government has not gotten much advances in this way. For example, the airport project has not been approved by the federal oversee council because have been found several irregularities in it. Indeed, there is a dispute among others cities around the Vitória. This contest is because each one want to build the new airport in its territory. So, another problem that must be solved.

Therefore, while the new airport isn’t builded, the population stay in a bad situation as it’s flies demand aren’t satisfied as its city stay undeveloped.
  

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Vitória is a city in Brazil with great potential. There are some reasons to believe that this city can become a better place to live. For example, its natural attractions like beaches, and mountains are a sight that can help the city develop.

  • Vitória is a city in Brazil with great potential.
  • There are some reasons to believe that this city can become a better place to live.
  • For example, its natural attractions like beaches, and mountains are a sight that can help the city develop.
  • Indeed, several companies are installing offices in the city.
  • Because of this, much qualified manpower has been attracted to Vitória.
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Vitória is a city in Brazil with great potential. There are some reasons to believe that this city can become a better place to live. For example, its natural attractions like beaches, and mountains are a sight that can help the city develop. Indeed, several companies are installing offices in the city. Because of this, much qualified manpo
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Thank you so much, Key1. Your corretions have been very useful.
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Your written English is fantastic; however, you may want to work on your articles a little more. (Articles as in " a, an, the.")

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