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Tscalasal Posted 12 years ago
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A better version of the paragraph, without changing the context. Please?

"The law states that a concession contract results from a public tender, which is a good provision in order to prevent corruption, so as to choose the best proposal which offers the best advantages and possibility of results and gains to the Mozambican State.
It will also promote a competitive, more just and collectively fairer procedure at the same time, for the benefit of the society."
  

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If you use shorter, clearer sentences, it will be better. Your use of the pronoun "it" is ambiguous. The law states that a concession contract results from a public tender.

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  • If you use shorter, clearer sentences, it will be better.
  • Your use of the pronoun "it" is ambiguous.
  • The law states that a concession contract results from a public tender.
  • That is a good law because it prevents corruption and allows the choice of the best option among different proposals.
  • The winning contract is one that has the best advantages, conforms to the contractual terms, produces desired results and thus, is beneficial to the Mozambican State.
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If you use shorter, clearer sentences, it will be better. Your use of the pronoun "it" is ambiguous.

The law states that a concession contract results from a public tender. That is a good law because it prevents corruption and allows the choice of the best option among different proposals. The winning contract is one that has the best advantages, conforms to the contractual terms, produ
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I did not write those sentences. I am studying the law to write a summary.... working on several projects simultaneously.
Thanks.
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