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Weebeast Posted 18 years ago
Letter Writing

4 Schoole letters.Can somebody look at it?

hello i need to make a school test friday.We need to make a english letter and i already made 4 letters practicing it.Can somebody check it out?

First letter:

Grotestraat 144
5431 DM Cuijk
The Netherlands

Greenpeace International
Ms A. Rosalind
Keizersgracht 176
1016 DW

15-01-2008

Ms A. Rosalind

When i saw your advertation in the Newspaper(Volkskrant) of 4 Novemeber 2007.I got very intrested in that job because i like greenpeace.They help the nature so it can survive.

I was very intrested in the activity's of greenpeace for many years.I was intrested because you are active involved and you need much guts but it is original work.Organisations like greenpeace are very important because they help the naturen.So they are trying to make a safe future for our children.Not many organisations care about that.

I regret on the first 3 conditions in the advertisement.I got high notes in oral english and in writing english.Thats not all because I know W.P (word processing) programm and I already made 2 projects with it.1 of them is in english and the other 1 is in dutch.It's not difficult for me to make such a project with the wordprocessing programm.

I think that I am a decent person for this job because I help with organising a sport day.Thats not everything because I am a member of the editorial staff for schoolpaper

You can find more information in my curricullum vital and some reference

I hope to hear from you soon

Yours sincerelly,

Milad De Boer

The other 3 letters will come soon

Thanks in advance

Milad
  

Top answer

Hello, Milad, and welcome to English Forums. I have underlined some problem areas in your letter: 15-01-2008 ( date is in the wrong place ) Dear Ms A. They help the nature so it can survive.

  • Hello, Milad, and welcome to English Forums.
  • I have underlined some problem areas in your letter: 15-01-2008 ( date is in the wrong place ) Dear Ms A.
  • They help the nature so it can survive.
  • Organisations like greenpeace are very important because they help the naturen .
  • Not many organisations care about that.
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Hello, Milad, and welcome to English Forums. I have underlined some problem areas in your letter:



15-01-2008 (date is in the wrong place)

Dear Ms A. Rosalind

When i saw your advertation in the Newspaper(Volkskrant) of 4 Novemeber 2007.I got very intrested in that job because

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