#3 Could I ask for validation about my text?

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I have divided the source into three sentences and slightly modified the sentences; please validate my text.

There was a bit delay. Furthermore, It was even raining.

Even though it was the situation distinctly not to execute the work because of raining then, he gave us the concrete feedback of the cause of not being able to work.

After we knew It wouldn't stop raining, he ventured the work taking pictures in spite of continuously raining.

Clive · Accepted Answer

There was a bit delay. This makes no sense. Do you mean eg a small delay? eg a big delay?

Furthermore, It was even raining. Why do you say 'even'?

Even though it was the situation distinctly not to execute the work because of raining then, he gave us the concrete feedback of the cause of not being able to work. I don't understand this sentence at all, so it is hard to comment on all the things that are wrong..
eg If the situation was clear, why did he tell you about it?
eg 'Feedback' usually comments on work that has been done, but here there seems to have been no work done.
eg What is 'concrete feedback'?

After we knew It wouldn't stop raining, he ventured the work taking pictures in spite of continuously raining.
Do you mean this?
After we realized it wouldn't stop raining, he ventured to start the work, taking pictures of the continuous rain.

Just add your response to this thread. You don't need to start a new one.

Clive

Park sang joon · Answer

Thank you very much for your advice and correction, Mr.Clive.

"There was a bit delay."
I meant a small delay by that.
"Furthermore, It was even raining."
I stressed the bad situation with 'even'.
"Even though it was the situation distinctly not to execute the work because of raining then, he gave us the concrete feedback of the cause of not being able to work."
I have corrected the above sentence to the below sentence.
"Even though it was the situation distinctly not to execute the work because of raining then, he informed us of the cause of not being able to work."
I would say this:
He didn't have to inform; nevertheless, he did, so the speaker think he was working hard with a sense of duty.

I will fowllow your version slightly modified by me for the last sentence.
After we realized it wouldn't stop raining, he ventured to start the work, taking pictures despite the continuous rain.

Clive · Answer

My comments are in blue. Your text is in black.

There was a bit of a delay. This is casual English for a short delay.

It was even raining. 'Furthermore' seems unnecessary.
'Even' also seems unnecessary to me, because the rain does not seem like a serious problem. You said there was just a short delay.

Another reason not to use 'even' above is that this next sentence starts with the word 'even'. Try to avoid such repetition.
Even though it was the situation distinctly not to execute the work because of raining then, he informed us of the cause of not being able to work. This whole sentence is unnaturally worded. I suggest this.
Even though it was clear that we couldn't work because of the rain, he officially told us not to.

After we realized it wouldn't stop raining, he ventured to start the work, taking pictures despite the continuous rain.

Clive

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