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Please help me to check this and correct some errors. Thank you &lt;3The linegraph illustrates the demand for energy in US in the phase of 50 years from 1980 to 2030.Overall, the consumption of fuel generally shows an upward trend throught the surveyed period except for hydropower. Petrol and oil was the most popular energy in all of the years shown.In 1980, the amount of petrol and oil consumed was the highest out of 6 types of fuel at 35 G units. In the next five years, the figure suddenly lost its momentum and bottomed at 31 units before recovering and reaching the peak of 50 G units. Similarly, natural gas demand is expected to increase steadily from 20 units to 25 units in the last year shown despote some fluctuations while coal witnessed a marked growth from 15 G units to the second rank at 27 G units in 2030.Starting off from 3 G units, Nuclear and solar& wind consumption is predicted to have the same tendency of a slight rise to 8 and 6 G units correspondingly by 2030. Throughout the 50-year period,  hydropower is forecastetd to remain constant with the amount of energy use at 3 G units

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The linegraph illustrates the demand (incorrect word) for energy in US in the phase (wrong word) of 50 years from 1980 to 2030. (You missed giving a lot of information to the reader about this graph. For example: Six types of fuel are shown: Petrol and oil, Also fuel usage is projected for 12 years into the future. The units on the Y axis are quadrillion (Q) units. )

Overall, the consumption of fuel generally shows an upward trend throught the surveyed (incorrect word. The instructions do not mention any survey. ) period except for hydropower. Petrol and oil was the fuel with the highest consumption ~~most popular~~ energy in all of the years shown.

(You missed some important points. For example, at the beginning, Americans used a total of 84 Q units of energy, and they are forecast to use 122 in 2030, an overall increase of 45% . Oil was the largest contributor, accounting for between 35 and 40% of the total. The combination of Hydropower, Solar and nuclear accounted for only 13-14% of the total. Coal and Natural gas were in second and third place, switching rank several times during the period. They were equal in 2016 at 25 Q units each, but coal is forecast to increase to 32 Q units, whereas Natural Gas will plateau at 25 Q units. )

In 1980, the amount of petrol and oil consumed was the highest out of 6 types of fuel (you never told the reader that there were any types of fuels.) at 35 G units. In the next five years, the figure (incorrect word) suddenly lost its momentum (That is not a scientific or mathematical description.) and bottomed at 31 units before recovering and reaching the peak (incorrect word. There are no peaks on the graph.) of 50 G units. Similarly, natural gas demand is expected to increase steadily from 20 units to 25 units in the last year (incorrect) shown despote some fluctuations (incorrect word) while coal witnessed (incorrect word, and incorrect tense) a marked growth from 15 G units to the second rank at 27 G units in 2030.

Starting off from 3 G units, Nuclear and solar& wind consumption is predicted to have the same ~~tendency of a~~ slight rise to 8 and 6 G units correspondingly by 2030. Throughout the 50-year period, hydropower is forecastetd to remain constant with the amount of energy use at 3 G units (missing punctuation.)

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