2 sentences, which one is better?
I wrote 2 sentences, which one is better?
It was the Dong Son cultural community, a highly developed culture, carrying the characteristics of Southeast Asian culture and wet rice civilization.
It was the Dong Son, a highly developed culture, carrying the characteristics of culture in Southeast Asia and rice cultures.
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Won Hae Yang It was the Dong Son cultural community, a highly developed culture, carrying the characteristics of Southeast Asian culture and wet rice civilization. 1) cultural community is not a natural phrase. Use with "culture" or "community" not both.
- Won Hae Yang It was the Dong Son cultural community, a highly developed culture, carrying the characteristics of Southeast Asian culture and wet rice civilization.
- 1) cultural community is not a natural phrase.
- Use with "culture" or "community" not both.
- 2) the participial clause makes the sentence seem ungrammatical.
- " 3) The sentence is verbose.
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Won Hae YangIt was the Dong Son cultural community, a highly developed culture, carrying the characteristics of Southeast Asian culture and wet rice civilization.
1) cultural community is not a natural phrase. Use with "culture" or "community" not both.
2) the participial clause makes the sentence seem ungrammatical. A context is required to determin
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