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Festisio Posted 20 years ago
Vatican City is within the city of Rome itself and boasts one of the greatest churches in history, St. Peter’s Basilica. St. Peter’s is an awesome place to visit and is the largest Catholic church in the world; it has been around for more than 400 years. The statues adorning the walls are brilliantly detailed. Directly outside the church is the Vatican Square where there are a few spectacular fountains; it is a truly a beautiful sight. Another part of the Vatican is the Sistine Chapel which has frescoes by Michelangelo on the ceiling. All this, including some cool shops and merchants, is located in Vatican City, the smallest country in the world. I plan to visit Vatican City again some day.
My computer is one of the best on the block. It has a Nvidia 6600GT Geforce video card, a 17” LCD monitor, and an AMD 3000+ processor. I would highly recommend these specifications to anyone looking for a good gaming computer. My Mom bought it for me for my birthday, and it works beautifully. One thing I do not like is that it does not have enough Random Access Memory (RAM). This causes it to lock up every now and then. This happens when a program sends information to the RAM for processing, but there is more information than the RAM can handle. Assuming that the RAM is the problem, all I can do is wait to get more. Despite this minor irritation, the graphics are still outstanding and the sound quality is fine. Although it locks up every now and again, my computer is still the best on the street.
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Vatican City is within the city of Rome itself and boasts one of the greatest churches in history, St. Peter’s Basilica. St. Peter’s is an awesome place to visit and is the largest Catholic church in the world; it has been around for more than 400 years. The statues adorning the walls are brilliantly detailed. Directly outside the church is the Vatican Square where there are a few spectacular fountains; it is a truly a beautiful sight. Another part of the Vatican is the Sistine Chapel which has frescoes by Michelangelo on the ceiling. All this, including some cool shops and merchants, is located in Vatican City, the smallest country in the world. I plan to visit Vatican City again some day.
My computer is one of the best on the block. It has a Nvidia 6600GT Geforce video card, a 17” LCD monitor, and an AMD 3000+ processor. I would highly recommend these specifications to anyone looking for a good gaming computer. My Mom bought it for me for my birthday, and it works beautifully. One thing I do not like is that it does not have enough Random Access Memory (RAM). This causes it to lock up every now and then. This happens when a program sends information to the RAM for processing, but there is more information than the RAM can handle. Assuming that the RAM is the problem, all I can do is wait to get more. Despite this minor irritation, the graphics are still outstanding and the sound quality is fine. Although it locks up every now and again, my computer is still the best on the street.
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The second paragrah is fine. In the first, I would not use "has been around". I would use "has existed".
- The second paragrah is fine.
- In the first, I would not use "has been around".
- I would use "has existed".
- " Has been around " suggests that it is peripatetic, which is quite a feat for a building!
- Also, in the section "All this, including some cool shops and merchants", you can't use " including " if you mean "in addition".
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The second paragrah is fine.
In the first, I would not use "has been around". I would use "has existed". "Has been around" suggests that it is peripatetic, which is quite a feat for a building!
Also, in the section "All this, including some cool shops and merchants", you can't use "including" if you mean "in addition". Better here to use "plus".
In the first, I would not use "has been around". I would use "has existed". "Has been around" suggests that it is peripatetic, which is quite a feat for a building!
Also, in the section "All this, including some cool shops and merchants", you can't use "including" if you mean "in addition". Better here to use "plus".
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