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B Man Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
1st college essay. Please evaluate and assist. Thank you
Instructions for assignment
Length is 500-800 words. Do not use any research material in this essay. The information should come from your own knowledge and personal experience. Have an introduction paragraph, 2-4 body paragraphs, and a conclusion paragraph.
As the writer, you cannot merely tell the reader something, but must show the reader through examples. Some examples may be only one or two words, while other examples may include a few sentences. Examples can include specific people, places, objects, personal experiences, anecdotes, statistics, or research
To organize and develop your essay, make sure you present your main idea, or thesis, at the end of the introductory paragraph. Each body paragraph (usually there are two - four) begins with a topic sentence, which just happens to be a main reason or example that supports the thesis statement of the essay. The remainder of each body paragraph will contain as many appropriate examples as necessary to support the main point of the paragraph. The last paragraph of your essay will conclude your main points in an appropriate way. When using examples to develop your essay, make sure each example is relevant and provides enough insight to help persuade or convince your reader. Furthermore, consider your reader as you determine how many examples are necessary and what particular types of examples would be most effective.
Two problem areas to avoid in the example essay are not providing enough specific detail and the lack of coherence. Examples should be clear and specific in order to have the most impact on the reader. For instance, in an essay claiming that dogs on the loose are a nuisance in neighborhoods, it is too general merely to state in a paragraph that loose dogs cause much work for homeowners. The writer should get more specific with examples of dogs destroying shrubs and flowers and spotting and wetting in yards. In order to avoid a lack of coherence in an essay, the writer should ensure that there is a continuous flow of thought from one example to another within each paragraph, as well as from one paragraph to another. A few common transition words that can help give an example essay coherence include "for example," "for instance," "in particular," "specifically," "another," and "in addition."
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As a licensed practical nurse working in a hospital setting I encounter a lot of different types of patients that are admitted to my facility. Most are helpful and compliant with their medical care and are looking for nothing more than to get well enough to go home. Then there is the other small percentage of individuals who think the rules don’t apply to them and refuse treatment, advice and endanger themselves and others by smoking while in the hospital. These are the patient's that if caught smoking in hospital should be subject to stiff fines and/or penalties.
I've heard of it in the news, on the Internet and was told about it while in nursing school like it was some kind of an Urban Legend, patients who cause tremendous damage to themselves and their surroundings by smoking while on oxygen. I never really grasped the severity of this issue until I had admitted a patient, not once, but twice for facial burns secondary to smoking while on oxygen at home. These types of patients exhibit poor decision-making and are a threat to themselves and others.
Patients in the hospital fail to realize the damage they place themselves in when hiding in bathrooms or behind curtains trying to conceal the fact that they are smoking. Fire only needs three components to form. This collaboration of components is called the fire triangle. The first component is fuel; this can be in any form such as liquid, solid, or gas i.e. clothing, linen, and paper. Component number two is in well abundance in any hospital, oxygen. Oxygen comes in two forms: tanks that are portable and from the wall via a central oxygen supply. And finally the last component so generously supplied by our noncompliant patients is heat. Heat supplied by a lighter or cigarette is all that is required to complete this triangle and cause a fire. Let me also enlighten you as to how the patient receives this oxygen. Oxygen is transported to the patient either by a mask or thin hollow tubing called a nasal cannula, both of which are attached to the patient's face. These two devices not only transport oxygen to the patient but also by proxy allow oxygen to accumulate around its users so that when a person smokes he or she is saturated with oxygen allowing the fire not only to form but also to burn hotter and longer.
We as nurses try to prevent this from happening by offering our patient's other ways of receiving the nicotine they are so dependent on. The nicotine patch, gum and lozenge are all used to help prevent the patients from smoking while in the hospital. We also offer withdrawal and cessation medications i.e.: Chantix or Wellbutrin to help curve their desire for cigarettes while admitted. Patients are given all this along with education to help them through their already stressful admission and yet some still fail to follow the advice and rules of the hospital and light up while in their room.
I know where I work we can call security and they will help enforce the no smoking rule. Security informs our patient's that they will receive $500 fine if caught smoking again. This so far is only a threat as I have never seen it implemented. Though this threat works fine for some, others still persist and continue to smoke in secret. It should be in my opinion explained to all patients being admitted to the hospital that smoking is not allowed and if you are caught this initial explanation serves as your verbal warning and a fine will follow. To this fact an agreement should be signed by patient and representative so that there is no miscommunication. The patient should be given every courtesy to make his or her stay as bearable as possible. Offering them all the treatment and education available to us and informing them of the dangers they risk to themselves and quite possibly the innocent bystander while smoking around oxygen.
Thankyou for taking the time to read and evaluate me. It's greatly appreciated
Length is 500-800 words. Do not use any research material in this essay. The information should come from your own knowledge and personal experience. Have an introduction paragraph, 2-4 body paragraphs, and a conclusion paragraph.
As the writer, you cannot merely tell the reader something, but must show the reader through examples. Some examples may be only one or two words, while other examples may include a few sentences. Examples can include specific people, places, objects, personal experiences, anecdotes, statistics, or research
To organize and develop your essay, make sure you present your main idea, or thesis, at the end of the introductory paragraph. Each body paragraph (usually there are two - four) begins with a topic sentence, which just happens to be a main reason or example that supports the thesis statement of the essay. The remainder of each body paragraph will contain as many appropriate examples as necessary to support the main point of the paragraph. The last paragraph of your essay will conclude your main points in an appropriate way. When using examples to develop your essay, make sure each example is relevant and provides enough insight to help persuade or convince your reader. Furthermore, consider your reader as you determine how many examples are necessary and what particular types of examples would be most effective.
Two problem areas to avoid in the example essay are not providing enough specific detail and the lack of coherence. Examples should be clear and specific in order to have the most impact on the reader. For instance, in an essay claiming that dogs on the loose are a nuisance in neighborhoods, it is too general merely to state in a paragraph that loose dogs cause much work for homeowners. The writer should get more specific with examples of dogs destroying shrubs and flowers and spotting and wetting in yards. In order to avoid a lack of coherence in an essay, the writer should ensure that there is a continuous flow of thought from one example to another within each paragraph, as well as from one paragraph to another. A few common transition words that can help give an example essay coherence include "for example," "for instance," "in particular," "specifically," "another," and "in addition."
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As a licensed practical nurse working in a hospital setting I encounter a lot of different types of patients that are admitted to my facility. Most are helpful and compliant with their medical care and are looking for nothing more than to get well enough to go home. Then there is the other small percentage of individuals who think the rules don’t apply to them and refuse treatment, advice and endanger themselves and others by smoking while in the hospital. These are the patient's that if caught smoking in hospital should be subject to stiff fines and/or penalties.
I've heard of it in the news, on the Internet and was told about it while in nursing school like it was some kind of an Urban Legend, patients who cause tremendous damage to themselves and their surroundings by smoking while on oxygen. I never really grasped the severity of this issue until I had admitted a patient, not once, but twice for facial burns secondary to smoking while on oxygen at home. These types of patients exhibit poor decision-making and are a threat to themselves and others.
Patients in the hospital fail to realize the damage they place themselves in when hiding in bathrooms or behind curtains trying to conceal the fact that they are smoking. Fire only needs three components to form. This collaboration of components is called the fire triangle. The first component is fuel; this can be in any form such as liquid, solid, or gas i.e. clothing, linen, and paper. Component number two is in well abundance in any hospital, oxygen. Oxygen comes in two forms: tanks that are portable and from the wall via a central oxygen supply. And finally the last component so generously supplied by our noncompliant patients is heat. Heat supplied by a lighter or cigarette is all that is required to complete this triangle and cause a fire. Let me also enlighten you as to how the patient receives this oxygen. Oxygen is transported to the patient either by a mask or thin hollow tubing called a nasal cannula, both of which are attached to the patient's face. These two devices not only transport oxygen to the patient but also by proxy allow oxygen to accumulate around its users so that when a person smokes he or she is saturated with oxygen allowing the fire not only to form but also to burn hotter and longer.
We as nurses try to prevent this from happening by offering our patient's other ways of receiving the nicotine they are so dependent on. The nicotine patch, gum and lozenge are all used to help prevent the patients from smoking while in the hospital. We also offer withdrawal and cessation medications i.e.: Chantix or Wellbutrin to help curve their desire for cigarettes while admitted. Patients are given all this along with education to help them through their already stressful admission and yet some still fail to follow the advice and rules of the hospital and light up while in their room.
I know where I work we can call security and they will help enforce the no smoking rule. Security informs our patient's that they will receive $500 fine if caught smoking again. This so far is only a threat as I have never seen it implemented. Though this threat works fine for some, others still persist and continue to smoke in secret. It should be in my opinion explained to all patients being admitted to the hospital that smoking is not allowed and if you are caught this initial explanation serves as your verbal warning and a fine will follow. To this fact an agreement should be signed by patient and representative so that there is no miscommunication. The patient should be given every courtesy to make his or her stay as bearable as possible. Offering them all the treatment and education available to us and informing them of the dangers they risk to themselves and quite possibly the innocent bystander while smoking around oxygen.
Thankyou for taking the time to read and evaluate me. It's greatly appreciated
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I haven't thought up a good title yet. The thesis of the paper is "patient's that if caught smoking in hospital should be subject to stiff fines and/or penalties. "
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