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Mumi-girl Posted 17 years ago
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Please check my grammar in this sentance:

Many develop an eating disorder which can lead to diabetes, heart attack or other obesity related illnesses.
  

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Two options add an "s" to make heart attack plural or put an "a" after the comma to make ... , a heart etc.... Either makes the sentence is correct

— Geoffmarbella

  • Two options add an "s" to make heart attack plural or put an "a" after the comma to make ...
  • , a heart etc....
  • Either makes the sentence is correct
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Two options add an "s" to make heart attack plural or put an "a" after the comma to make ... , a heart etc.... Either makes the sentence is correct
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My suggested version: Many people develop an eating disorder, which can lead to diabetes, heart attacks or other obesity-related illnesses. Sincerely, James (P.S. the comma is necessary after "disorder" because the relative pronoun "which" does not refer to "disorder"; rather, it refers to "Many people develop an eating disorder." Grammar books would construe that use of "which" as meaning "
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mumi-girlPlease check my grammar in this sentance:

Many develop an eating disorder which can lead to diabetes, heart attack or other obesity related illnesses.

obesity-related illnesses.
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