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Odessa Dawn Posted 10 years ago
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My future goal

My future goal is to help me get to where I can grow and, therefore, serving humanity since serving others is the greatest educational discipline. I have no intention of studying in Saudi universities as I want to experience new life styles and educational systems. Having the chance to see and share the different perspective on my major that might not yet have been expressed/covered in Saudi universities classes. In addition, I am societal and enjoy meeting people from other cultures and different countries. I will feel comfortable with international students. And studying abroad is a great benefit that, for example, levels up my personal confidence and have some independence. Finally, have I been given a chance to study in your university, I will implement what I learn in everyday living and pass them on.

Are ideas clearly expressed? Would you check its grammar and word choice?
  

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Odessa Dawn Are ideas clearly expressed? I'm afraid not. I suggest you rewrite it in a simpler and more direct way.

— Teechr

  • Odessa Dawn Are ideas clearly expressed?
  • I'm afraid not.
  • I suggest you rewrite it in a simpler and more direct way.
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Odessa DawnAre ideas clearly expressed?
I'm afraid not. I suggest you rewrite it in a simpler and more direct way.
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Hi teechr; Emotion: bow

How is it now?

My future goal is to pursue my higher education in most of the reputable universities.
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It's not much better. Are you translating directly from another language? If so, that doesn't work.
Rewrite is using simpler expressions/sentences. Consider even using point form.
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Thank you teechr. Emotion: bow

My future goal

? getting to where I can grow
? pursuing my higher education i
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Odessa DawnAre you translating directly from another language?Yes.
That usually doesn't work. The above sounds like waffle; it lacks substance.
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Should I rewrite the post to make it meaningful?
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Yes, that would be a good idea.
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My future goal is 1) to get to where I can grow to an international average and excel academically, 2) to have an adequate education pushing me up to the quality scale, 3) to allocate enough resources help continue to my research, 4) to have the chance of sharing different perspective on my major that might not yet have been covered at my home country, and 5) to meet people from other cultures an
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My future goal is 1) to get to where I can grow to an international average and excel academically, 2) to have an adequate education pushing me up to the quality scale, 3) to allocate enough resources help continue to my research, 4) to have the chance of sha
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Hi teechr;

I want to say:

to get to where I can grow to an international average

1= to get to where I can grow (attending a reputable university or anything of it that helps me grow) so that I become a distinguished and a world-renowned clinical and consulting psychologist.

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