Plz help me in checking (correcting) this short essay, needed tomorrow!!

Searching for authority & power has made many countries
strive for them mostly through an illegtimate way that is war(style)
As a result, the condintions of the world have shifted into a state of
trublence,violence & disorder. considering our bitter situation today one
can’t deny the fact that children suffer from the aftermath of
war.(sudden shift)American aggression on Iraq has impact upon Iraqi children’s
psychology,social interaction & health.

Stressed behaviors have risen to the surface in many Iraqi
children. They are imitating the outside environment by being
violent & savage. They have a sense of reaction towards the outside
Surroundings. Breaking laws, hitting people ,being quick-tempered are
the main characteristics of the aggressive children. In fact, they begin
to lose hope in the future thinking that this disastrous situation will
last/continue for ever.This is natural due to their narrow-minded which
doesn’t enable them to see things as what they really are. Most
important of all,they are panicked at everything which affect the
course of their life negatively. They are afraid of going to sleep at night
believing that they will have something terrible . Also ,they don’t want
their parents to leave them either they are frightened that something
dangerous will happen to thier parents or to them.

Children face developmental challenges of starting a new life
regarding social affairs. Children have difficulties adjusting to this new
situation without having parents or relatives.Parents are the main
source of safety for them. Under these circumstances ,children & their
families are forced to break off social connections. Moreover,children
avoid activities they used to enjoy since they don’t have the spirit &
motive to do so.

No one can eliminate the destructive effects of war on children’s
health.Unfortunately,the Ministry of Health was directly hit,
telecommunications were lost, & transport capability reduced to 10
% preventing the distribution of essential medical supplies. Added to
this,officals of the Ministry as well as volunteers can’t move around
easily healing/treating others because of the dangerous situation
outside. Hence, its naturally that war caused many cases of handicapped
chidren.In this unhealthy, dirty environment its not strange that
unknown maladies start to appeare especially in the post- war period.

A focus on psychological treatment should be given in order to heal
the scars of war.

*by the way,the inroductory & concluding paragraphs r already have been corrected by my Professor but they still need correction...the mistakes are (that is war)concerning style,&the thesis sentence beginning with (American agression)is considered a sudden shift..
the correction include:style ,flow of ideas ,coherence & grammar..
thanks in advance