Hello Stringer, Your essay reads reasonably well, but it is-- as are most essays-- too wordy, redundant and convoluted. It should be much simpler, clearer and more direct. Let me whittle away at your first paragraph, for instance: ORIGINAL: A typical policeman, in most developed countries, would instill a sense of security in one’s mind, exhibit honesty, confidence and last but not the least discipline.
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