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Essay & Composition Writing
Government's main priority: education? (Guest:Sofía)
Rob, this is my homework. I would be very grateful if you check it!..
Topic for The essay: A government's main priority is to provide education for its people
It is generally accepted that the educational level of each country have a direct relationship with its developement . In other words, as much people have access to education, the country have more opportunities to grow. Therefore goverments have to spend an important part of their budget to provide good educational levels for their people. Since the last century, most of goverments have understood the importance of education and they have made large programmes for teaching people to read and write.
Nowadays, people need more tools than read and write to get a job and goverments must make a bigger effort in education to provide it them. Furthermore, countries need education to support its democracies since people need education to be aware of their rights and to demand respect for them. However, governments have to attend other important needs for its people such as providing health and work.
It is generally accepted that sometimes is most urgently for people be able to get food and basic health assistance than education, above all, citizens of poor countries. Nevertheless, I firmly believe that if governments do not put attention on education's development, it is very probable that their hand work remain in basic levels and their industries not become to develop themselves and earn too much money.
Finally, It seems to me that goverments not only have to invest in basic education, but also in high education because only the research and university work could provide new tools and new solutions for countries' needs and along with this, people could get more opportunities to develop themselves as persons.
Topic for The essay: A government's main priority is to provide education for its people
It is generally accepted that the educational level of each country have a direct relationship with its developement . In other words, as much people have access to education, the country have more opportunities to grow. Therefore goverments have to spend an important part of their budget to provide good educational levels for their people. Since the last century, most of goverments have understood the importance of education and they have made large programmes for teaching people to read and write.
Nowadays, people need more tools than read and write to get a job and goverments must make a bigger effort in education to provide it them. Furthermore, countries need education to support its democracies since people need education to be aware of their rights and to demand respect for them. However, governments have to attend other important needs for its people such as providing health and work.
It is generally accepted that sometimes is most urgently for people be able to get food and basic health assistance than education, above all, citizens of poor countries. Nevertheless, I firmly believe that if governments do not put attention on education's development, it is very probable that their hand work remain in basic levels and their industries not become to develop themselves and earn too much money.
Finally, It seems to me that goverments not only have to invest in basic education, but also in high education because only the research and university work could provide new tools and new solutions for countries' needs and along with this, people could get more opportunities to develop themselves as persons.
Top answer
First, don't use I in this paper because you haven't really instantiated part of your experience. You are only stating what you think and you wouldn't be writing this paper unless that's what you really think, I hope so. I don't see the thesis statement, or if I do, I don't see your supporting of it.
- First, don't use I in this paper because you haven't really instantiated part of your experience.
- You are only stating what you think and you wouldn't be writing this paper unless that's what you really think, I hope so.
- I don't see the thesis statement, or if I do, I don't see your supporting of it.
- It sounds to me that your thesis is: Since the last century, most of goverments have understood the importance of education and they have made large programes for teaching people to read and write.
- You never actually talked about how most of the governments understood the importance of education in the last century.
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First, don't use I in this paper because you haven't really instantiated part of your experience. You are only stating what you think and you wouldn't be writing this paper unless that's what you really think, I hope so.
I don't see the thesis statement, or if I do, I don't see your supporting of it. It sounds to me that your thesis is: Since the last century, most
I don't see the thesis statement, or if I do, I don't see your supporting of it. It sounds to me that your thesis is: Since the last century, most
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Hi Sofia,
As I said in class, you need to work on the basic structure: introduction, body and conclusion.
Remember the sentences of the intro. Introducing the general topic then narrow that topic down to focus on the question. Restate the question in your own words and most importantly, state your thesis statement. The thesis statement is normally the last sentence of the Intro.
As I said in class, you need to work on the basic structure: introduction, body and conclusion.
Remember the sentences of the intro. Introducing the general topic then narrow that topic down to focus on the question. Restate the question in your own words and most importantly, state your thesis statement. The thesis statement is normally the last sentence of the Intro.
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Woodward is a teacher! OMG, I should be more careful with my comments, seriously! I just have a question, do we really have to follow that old, boring, hackneyed style of writing: introduction, body, and conclusion? I do it for my college paper, but do we really have to?
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LOL...don't worry about your comments. I'm a teacher but it doesn't mean I know everything. I love to know other people's opinions and ideas, be they from other teachers or students. Don't Change what you have been doing until now!
Though it seems traditionally boring and typical, the I-B-C type of essay, it is usually the best way to express your thesis, and often the people that mark
Though it seems traditionally boring and typical, the I-B-C type of essay, it is usually the best way to express your thesis, and often the people that mark
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Yeah, and I'll find my own structure, hopefully when I become a seasoned writer, though I have no plans in becoming one.
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For me, as a teacher, the task is quite clear. To drive the more executive type of students towards creativity, and the creative ones towards executiveness.( while practicing and producing the language of course) . So the classical I B C type of structural limitations would be useful to be prometed in the second group. Though an essay bt itself is a creative task. The limitation of thinking by an
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I agree with you Pieter. Creativity should be let to flow freely, the only problem with that is that International examiners are stuck in their typical I-B-C ways and anything other than what they are used to is a shock to their system. I am totally for students freely expressing themselves, I wish the examiners (and the exam marking guides) thought the same way.
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You know, sometimes it's a strange situation. Who's examining who? I myself don't have any certificates. Nobody asks me what kind of papers I have.if I'm good. This whole examination system seems to me similar to the strictly structured and restricted regulations of the multinationals ( that I have experienced for 6 years) which kills individuality and creative thinking. It's so stupid to see so
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Yeah, I forgot. I was thinking about attending some courses at one of the local universities.( whose level is unimaginable, no Native speaker teachers,no computers, no videos, just some blackboards.) For a while I could play the " novice" and then start to ask questions. Difficult ones. And have fun. But i'm not as bad. And I don't have enough time. But i hate mediocrity and disinterest when it's
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